Wednesday, May 27, 2009

Balloon Madness

Balloon Madness


Splash!! I sprinted to the tree for cover. I was being chased. I threw the one I was holding at my brothers shoe “goal!” I said. It all started when my mum said we were going to my cousins house,I was really excited but I didn’t know it would turn in to a war.

 

When we got there the war started instantly,water flew at every body from every direction except me because I was running.


Splash!! I ran to a to tree for cover splash!! I ran to  the house picking up to water balloons on the way. Splash!! I ran to the tree,again for cover. I was being chased. I threw one at my brother “Goal” I said,I ducked water balloons came from the sky,nearly touching me. “Aaaaaagh” I yelled. I threw a balloon into the air [randomly] splash!! “My head!” a voice yelled I started laughing I laughed so hard that I couldn’t breath for a minute. A few moments later I was boxed in by my brother and my cousin. I tripped my brother and his balloon exploded,I ran around the tree and took the balloon off my cousin and threw it at him,I couldn’t hold it in,I burst into laughter,for some reason the war ended just when I started laughing.


We all went inside and started to dry off. I was the only one that wasn’t wet, it was so funny I laughed all the way home and at home,it never got old it was, the funniest day of my life!’ 


By David

1 comment:

Pete Hall said...

David this is great!
I love how you started the story with a 'flash forward' to the middle. It's a really good idea to hook the reader in.

Nice work.

Mr Hall